Cpt. Smurf

I liked it, although I think some of the sentences were a bit iffy, such as: I bit that thought off before it could go into frightening places. I don't ...

I thought this was very good, as was Chapter 1. It kept my attention, a great feat, as I am not particularly good at concentrating on reading the entries in ...

I liked this. It was grammatically correct, and it kept my attention all the way through, which, considering I'm rather tired, is very good. One thing I would like to ...

Firstly, I just want to say to Sean, the length of a prologue is irrelevant. It is the quality of the content which is important. Now, to the critique. This ...

Wow, this is my forst critique in ages. Here goes: I quite liked this, I thought you captured the cruelty of the man quite well. The elf's (she is an ...

Yay, go Saga of Darren Shan title! Yep, I'm British too! I've just started reading Cirque Du Freak , today, actually, and from what I've read already, it does seem ...

Hi. I read up to the bit with the letters, I'll finish it later. Most things have already been discussed, so I would just like to mention one thing. To ...

Well, I find Harry Potter ultimately the better book. LOTR is so description-heavy, we don't need to read ten pages describing a mountain. I think the plot of LOTR is ...

To me Inheritance cannot compete with HP. I find Inheritance a complete rip-off of at least two other great series: Star Wars (plot-wise) and LOTR (world- and language-wise). Star Wars ...

As a prologue, I think this is quite good. I'm not entirely sure about the opening sentence, though, as it seems to have nothing to do with the rest of ...

I very rarely look anywhere but the fantasy section, and i'm glad i did this time. Normally i would have gotten tire of reading that much (im impatient!) long ago, ...

I thought this was good, very readable, which i think counts for a lot: if there's one flaw that books like LOTR and His Dark Materials have, it's that they ...

I have to say I was a little confused by this. We have: An elf, a dwarf, someone called Nigel and someone called Alden. I couldn't tell who was who ...

Hi, and welcome to YWS! There's no need to apologise, you're here to improve! The general plot of this was promising, but it needs to be edited a huge amount ...

I agree with Jesseble - I thought the beginning was great. It got my interest straight away. The plotline was a bit weird, but we all love a weird story! ...